Comments of chapter undefined of Apotheosis.

I wanna give you two suggestions that can probably help you. The first one is to write smaller paragraphs with around four to five lines. The reason is that almost all readers use App and reading a paragraph with ten or above lines can kill their interest. The second is that try to put some dialogues/conversations in the early chapters. It's another way of attracting readers. You can skip the second one for this story but maybe it can be useful in the future. (You can delete it after reading😉)