Comments of chapter undefined of Overlord: Rei Shiba
Overlord: Rei Shiba
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The story is pretty good but there are some parts which could be changed, like: 1) Sometimes there is too much spotlight on Solution it feels like she's the MC instead of him. 2) By reading the last few chapters I feel like I'm not reading a Overlord fanfic cause technically he has spent more time in his garden and negotiation room than in the Overlord world and by reading your note you aren't that interested in expanding much on overlord world while a lot more can be achieved by expanding upon other countries and oc continents. 3) Feel didn't feel excited about his new world and Nazarick even though he spent so many years preparing for it, he didn't explore wild magic, kinda disappointing. He didn't change anything in Nazarick except Solution when he could've gotten his own floor guardian and stuff. It feels like he is seperated from Nazarick. 4) Sometimes I saw you getting too carried away explaining mechanics of the world/magic it got boring. 5) Also main point is that I don't see the MC having a goal in his mind in the new world, he says he wants a country but no responsibility which is dumb. Stopping Momonga from logging off was a bad move I must say cause I feel like you're setting them up against each other which feels unnecessary. These are the ones I can come up at the moment but as always writing was on point and the story was interesting but idk about multiverse stuff. Even though I've wrote so much about things I'm not satisfied in the story I needed to think a lot to pinpoint stuff cause the novels you write are great. So I would say like I said at the start you should consider doing AU where there is only one MC(no Momonga) or mc gets transmigrated as Satoro. Anyway thanks for the story!
Thanks for the story. Sincerely it was a nice read. There was no issues with grammer from what I observed. I liked the way you evolved the characters. I would like if this story continued, but I understated if it will not. It really was a nice read. And really had me looking forward to what other character would he summon. Or what wpulrd would he go to.
I generally liked it, but too much details eludes or given not on time. For example, the appearance of MC, its race and class we will not know right away, and some details like the color of the hair, and at all in the 50+ chapter. I am also not too clear some of the actions of the hero. But I do not see any special reasons to discuss them.
story is really great. it's one of the best if not the best Overlord Fanfic. i love the specially their interactions in relationship with solution. sometimes there were a lot of stats and that the MC faded a little bit into the background but it didn't matter too much. all in all it isn't absolutely magnificent story and you should think about continuing it pumped
I liked the story but I felt that in many moments the protagonist he became a supporting role and Solution became the protagonist, that in itself is not all bad but it's still a point down, the protagonist didn't have an 'appearance' concrete to these last few chapters in which it makes immersion a bit difficult (it's only said that he has golden eyes like a snake and black hair), the protagonist often seems quite out of place in Nazarick, which he shouldn't even be eligible for after all. played for 12 years and spent billions on the game, he could have changed the mindset of many NPCs and/or add new things to Nazarick itself, I feel that in his eagerness to go to a new world he neglected the guild he played for for more than 10 hours a day for the last 12 years (you see it's a little difficult, he would have a special attachment) and even in the new world he feels like he doesn't belong to Nazarick, i must say the third wish was something well thought out and merlin as a prime The subordinate was good, I also feel that as bad as the MC's character creation skill is bad, he could pay a guild member to create the 'image' of the NPC he will assemble and it could make this NPC as powerful as the Solution, I thought that even spending billions there was still something he could have improved. as for the new world itself was it a little disappointing i guess? I mean he did the same as the ainz in Cerne village and then went to the elf village and locked himself in his pocket dimension, he could have explored more before reaching the elves, or not spent so much time in their dimension, and though have these errors is how I said I liked the work a lot. thanks for the good read.
Thanks for the story, it was quite entertaining to read and to pass the time. It was seen that I wanted to put information on how you built and cheated your characters, the explanation was not bad, but I feel that it lacked some touch, I hope that at some point you continue it or on the contrary you create a better story.
