KyleSullivanJr
hey there, enjoying your story. maybe cut back on some of the chapters not focused on the MC, sometimes it kills the suspension. just my opinion tho, still enjoy your work. :)
KyleSullivanJr:Glad you are enjoying the story, but the side characters parts will affect the MCs part and eventually all meet into one story line. This is just my style of explaining what happping around the MC.