Comments of chapter undefined of Wizard World:Struggles of dimensions

Instead of telling us what happened, could you describe it. Also, you should have added some dialogue between the caravan and Layton. It would've given you alot of chances to world build. On that note, maybe you could've told us more about his backstory. We don't even know who was taking care of him after his parents death. You said he is a noble but didn't even tell us who the (lord?) of the family is. Also, I don't think his backstory as an orphan should mean he has no one close to him. It might make it convenient for the plot if the MC has no one but at the same time it makes it harder for us to relate to this character.

God!! Could you not write a paragraph long sentences. Other than that looks interesting.

you might want to get some help with your sentences. They are a little to long, its a great story though. I cant wait to continue reading.

Interesting first chapter

Interesting chapter, but I am rather confused about the world he’s in

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What world is rhis?

Thanks for the chapter and for all of your har work autnor stay safe

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thanks for the chapter

thanks for the chapter

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what is knight breathing

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