Comments of chapter undefined of The Vampire's Love: You Are My Destiny

Good story so far but a lot of language mistakes to correct. Correcting all the switches between past and present tense of the verbes would already make a great difference.

You can’T call your bad guys Black men. its insulting to black people. I advise that you edit that phrase

I'm enjoying the story.

I hate these kinda stories with such horrid language and spelling. Just reading a bit made my head hurt

tf

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I wish I could read it in the original language as I’m certain there is a lot missing and there is definitely much to be desired from the translation. Don’t get me wrong, having it translated and easily accessible is great, but maybe have people edit it after the translation (in the target language) before releasing? It just makes it look bad.

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