LoveIsHarem
the general idea of ââthe story is good but I think you advanced the romance too much, I say he met the girls in the morning and in the afternoon one was already a girlfriend and the other suitors, it is not for nothing but if the MC is not using magic charm i can't believe he conquered the 3 beauties of the school in just a few hours. another thing to be corrected is the honorary titles that the Japanese use, the author simply does not use and does not use the characters' surnames. it's like I said the idea of ââthe story is very good I just thought the story itself was very busy, I say the author could start the first chapter with the classes and a week or two after the launch of the game, in two weeks to 1 month the girls could show feelings for the protagonist, I say no one simply falls in love and enters into a relationship on the same day soon after meeting, even for love at first sight has limits, I thought Mamako's character needed a little more life , the protagonist has no 'soul' because the author simply placed the MC and then girls who enter the harem and ended up not presenting the MC's background or personality. pure criticism for good story-making. I hope for new chapters, and that the work becomes better with the advice. :)