Comments of chapter undefined of In the clutches of the dark prince

The tone is very mysterious and grabs my attention. One thing I would add is put more details about the surrounding (hospital bed). Keep up the good work!

good first chapter! :D would want to know more about this whole prince/princess thing :D

Nice chap intro 😉

This is interesting... good srart.

not bad, but nothing special either. I'd suggest doing some edits and maybe adding some more details. it's up to you though and feel free to disagree.

There's an interesting story in here, but as you may have surmised, your grammer and puctuation is getting in the way. If you have anyone who can act as an editor, I would highly recommend running it past them. A lot of these things are really simple mistakes that have an easy fix that would shove yoyr story up a nitch without you having to do much,

Thanks