MisterE05
The first chapter and I could spot over 20 grammatical errors that disrupt my reading. Likely even another dozen or so others if I looked. Also, quite a few plot holes. This first chapter has surpassed the realm of a sieve, extended beyond a net and delved into the realm of dysfunctionalism. I hope this improves in the next few chapters.
Hi, Author here. Rest assured that the content goes through waves of editing, and will eventually improve to meet your taste. English is my third language, so it's often difficult to smooth out errors. That aside, I encourage you to bare with the errors, as the content I'm trying to deliver focuses towards what's different. Hope these errors didn't mess with your day, and I hope to see more of you.