Missrealitybites
The original title is better. He is not actually the devil (unless he is), he is just the ‘devil’ to her. Also, the original title is more alluring. Another thing is I wouldn’t refer to him as the devil when you are writing about his mother and her thoughts about him. She clearly doesn’t think of him like that. He is clearly her dearest darling child. It is confusing the voices and thoughts between your characters and makes it confusing for the reader to understand each character’s POV.
Urm, I have one plot loophole that I wanted to ask about. If every woman that the prince touched dies, why is his mother still alive? Is it like an exception in the curse? From what I understand, the curse includes all kind of physical touch and that's why maids were not allowed in his quarter, right?