sleepymop
I think you write pretty decent, only hater will complain, experienced ones will give u a few pointers (not me im not that good xD) you can always take this as a training and try to enjoy making a novel, dont care about haters, cheers
I don't like it when they make the mc a super genius, because most can't keep it, and the mc ends up doing one stupidity after another, so I'd rather just let him go with time gaining experience, or something that justifies him getting smarter as a system, because it becomes more acceptable for him to be stupid, because originally he was stupid, although I don't like it yet, but him being a genius from the beginning is already more complicated, I hope you can keep him the way he was presented .