Daichi_TBR193
You did a fantastic job. I just can't wait for the next chapter. So please just release the next chapter as soon as possible. As for grammatical errors, I didn't find any I think. Suggestions:- • Upon receiving omnitrix he could try to get partial master control by using grey matter. • By using grey matter, he could record calculations, theory and different knowledge to later learn or go through in his human form.
to think that I would find another "Ben 10" story and nothing less than the author of the different stories that I like. - I liked how you started with the intro of a little "Ben 10", so that some who do not know about the series or forgot, know what it will be about, I also liked how you made the most intelligent protagonist, nothing like the original It was too childish and not to mention that you have a plan to be stronger (not like the other typical protagonists who take everything as a game, to later regret their stupidities xD). - Not to mention that apart from the "oxnitris" it also trains its anodite form or whatever they call it, you also put characters that come out later and added key people to their circle of friends. - I could be putting a testament to everything that comes to mind, but I only put some things that I liked about the change in the series "ben 10", I just hope you get more chapters and that you don't leave it abandoned like other authors who they left after 20 or 80 episodes max xD. -Here I give you a photo of how Issei's sister or Issei himself would be in a girl version:
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