Comments of chapter undefined of Osmosian Gamer(Rewrite Up)
Osmosian Gamer(Rewrite Up)
DanteMustDie
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Yes most definitely yes, Just a few quick ideas, Starfire is a warrior Princess she will have no problem killing at all the only reason she didn’t do it much on earth was because of local laws. Beast boy was part of the doom Patrol so no problem killing, but please make him a bit more grown up if you’re going to have him. Revan is a half demon she’ll get over it quickly, can you have MC get Revan to accept what she really is E.G. she’ll get a minor senses of enjoyment out of killing and torture. Cyborg leave him behind.
I feel the **** titans would be an intresting addition to the team building. Another option is to hop around universes collecting diffrent teammates. In tbe end they could end up in one of the Ben10 universes or something
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Beware of ruining your fanfic because of OPness .... In my opinion , the average power level of DC universe is much higher than Marvel universe .... But Marvel universe is better , in my opinion .... DC universe is just too OP , and the OPness is often unreasonable .... In DC , if you don't have a super power on the level of superman's , or you don't have a cool suit that gives abilities , or you aren't the best martial artist in the world ,... THEN , you are just shit ... Marvel universe on the other hand , has more reasonable powers & average power level ...
No and I'll share my reasoning. I honestly don't believe that this should devolve into a universe hopping fan-fic, I was surprised with the jump to the CW Arrowverse at first because of how sudden it was and honestly the first interactions between Kevin and the crossover team was rather enjoyable on my first read. This chapter however was really.... shallow? I honestly don't know how to describe it, getting past him absorbing Barry's, Kara's and Cisco's powers I just feel like he's already achieved his goal... Like honestly, who can contest him in strength with Kryptonian strength as a baseline? He's a Phoenix Force Conduit which basically makes him a Psionic God if he bothered to put in the practice. Now he's a Speed Force Conduit and forgive me if I'm wrong but I don't believe there's anyone in the Marvel universe that can actually even perceive him at his top speeds, setting aside the Celestials, Living Tribunal etc... but he would never butt heads with any of them and even if he did there'd need to be a lot more build up and something at actual stake for both sides for it to be even remotely interesting and RIGHT NOW Kevin has literally nothing he cares about except maybe Rogue who's just a blank slate that follows him around. That's without taking into account the reality warping powers he posses with the Aether in his home universe, he doesn't need a team, he doesn't need a harem, he needs to be actually fleshed out because I'm starting to get bored and annoyed. I can't speak for other readers, obviously a majority of this fan-fics audience wants him to have Raven's ass in the palm of his hand yet these are the same people that think that the TEEN TITANS of all people would be ok with murdering people, don't get me wrong they've done it before but it's not something that'll ever shift into a daily act for ANY of them aside from Damien Wayne's or Jason Todd's Robin. There are other things I'd like to point out to aid in my reasoning like that whole thing with the Dark Phoenix being so rushed and how this chapter was structured so awkwardly or even the interaction with the Avengers after the New York invasion but it's all too much for a comment, even what I've written so far feels like too much. I just really want this fan-fic to not turn into sh*t, the beginning chapters were actually interesting and entertaining and that's kinda why I kept reading to now.
