NakedApron
Well, I guess I'm stopping here. Enjoyed the story but this is definitely a slow pace, world and character-building story with action on the side that will eat too much money with little return. I find the characters interesting but that interest does not mean I'm invested or care about their motivations yet. Additionally, you were right to add moments of action/tension earlier in the story because I was close to dropping it (bored). Bottom line: Good plot, slow pace with side characters that lack depth and therefore cannot connect with the audience.