Alexander_the_grey
I stopped reading this fan fic. There is no character devrlopement or a progression in the storyline. Why do you think your main character has to be op, overall this is drivle masquerading as a fan fic. You do not take on a beloved work if you aren’T adding substance to the Origonal works. there is no substance here. Its Unimaginative Unoriginal and uninteresting.
20 years for kidnapping, torture, murder, experiments and performing rituals on LITTLE CHILDREN?! WTF?! Those crimes are definitely worthy of the death sentence! Dumbledore is clearly an idiot! They should use media against him or something... and later if this Aedan will be too friendly with Dumb ledore I probably stop reading this story... because here punishment clearly doesn’t fit the crime. Giving such a light sentence for those crimes is very bad example! Moody had no right to inform Dumbledore about Aedan condition, beyond that he was found... and Amelia isn’t even mad about that??? And if Dumbledore was informed then he knew what was the purpose of those rituals... and he knows that Lord V isn’t dead... does he want Voldemort with body like Aedan has?! I have a feeling that this Avery guy will be present at V resurrection... or later will help so V will be more of a challenge for our main lead...
Why doesn't he gell her to give Sirius Black a just trial ??? He can also illude about the fact the it was wormtail that ratted the potters out q, then transformed into a rat ... This way , Siriys can be out of Azkaban , raise harfy , and maybe also be Aeden's teacher .... Then ,he can meet amelia bones ... (I geard that sirius & amelia enter a relationship)
from every aspect jk romling script this albus dumb many name door was **** off evil that play by rules, owh my God if I'm albus, i'll constantly orgasm thinking not only one puppy's soon to be potter but other magical beast in wizard form bone's puppet, owh owh owh stupid lamb author, very good to made a perfect lamb soon to chops MC, be a shepherd please~