missRina
I’m really confused, is her name Bethel, Beth, Johanna, or Hannah. Why does her name keep changing?
this story needs MAJOR proofreading...
what's the difference between Bethel and Yohanna? what should people call her then??? i don't get it.
It should be "excited" not "escalated"! Does anyone have an idea of what "escalated" means?
needs alot of proof reading. If you're going to write about a country/city you aren't too familiar with, at least do research on them first. Israel is not in Africa.
needs a bit of editing, but interesting story so far
