Comments of chapter undefined of reborn as a hybrid in TVD and Teen Wolf DROPPED

honestly you just screwed it up , its like you are closing your eyes and imagining scenarios in your head then writing them , none linear , really out of place , no plot , like a kids fantasy cuz there is no way in hell that Elena would wake up then go '' you are single ? you are mine'' that just doesn't happen , if you really want to write an actual story at least think logically and build up the plot u cant jump from day 1 at school into killing originals and being op because that not what a story is man that's just you throwing scenes and ideas of a childish fantasy that the reader cant really enjoy or even appreciate and I'm not trying to be an ass about it but if you want to '' write a story'' u need a lot of work and a lot of planning and time u cant just throw things together and say this is a story , any case good luck in life and stay safe