Comments of chapter undefined of sovereign of gravity
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The plot/development started too abruptly. And the MC immediately is too accepting of changes. Maybe instead of just having the MC tell us his woes, there should be a chapter before this where we see his interactions with the villagers. And hear his back story through one of them. That would definitely make it more interesting than: MC awake at night lamenting over his depressing life - MC magically got a system - MC is okay will the fact that he just got a system and will have to murder people.
that is true, and it was one of my worries as I started this, in chapter 5 he talks a bit about his life, I mean, It's kinda hard for me to make perfect character development since I never wrote before and I'm always worried about my grammar since English isn't my language, but I'll take your advice and maybe write a chapter later on, how quickly his life changed and such or if you have suggestions I can work on