ShivYansh
Thanks for advice bro. This is my first time writing a novel. I will heed your advice for future works. Thanks.
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The story is ruined. What's the point of having the Betrayal chapter of all he's going to be a system spirit? What's the point of revenge when he's not doing it? And the kid? Why would he care of getting revenge for someone he doesn't nor care?
Its best to check the grammar. Use grammarly plugin if possible. try to write like a novel rather than like a play.
