KasiCair
KasiCair:I could... "Daga Kotowaru!" :D, Nah... maybe it will spur someone's imagination so here are snippets. I had a big plan with this one. For example, a character that didn't appear yet, Luna. I had a long term plan with Luna, marriage with Luna (Luna would basically outsmart MC into it without him even knowing), Luna's death at the hands of Dumbledore's schemes, and eventual "resurrection" through alchemy and the marriage ritual. Dumbledore: He seemed like a senile old fool so far but from 3rd year and up, I wanted to intensify his schemes and make him less passive. The real war in the shadows would start and all that shit. He would be major reason for many twists later on and his plots were supposed to have a major impact on the story. And later on, even become one of the main villains. Bella: She would have been a kind of secret weapon/assassin for Cissa and MC. I made everyone believe she died so she would be 'mysterious' murder of a sort for the public until her eventual 'rise from the dead' when her name comes out of the goblet of fire after Malfoy (who would be put there by MC) refused to participate (completely valid move without any repercussions). Basically, MC would be the fourth participant but he would refuse it and the goblet would then spew Malfoy's name who would follow MC and also refuse it only for the third name coming out... Bam, Bellatrix Black. Bella was also supposed to become a kind of a bogeyman for the Wizarding World as she would dispatch every enemy of hers with simple 1st Year Spells used with incredible creativity. Like flipping organs upside down and such... I wanted to make Neville and Hermione a kind of second main villains. Hermione would be manipulated a bit by Dumbledore (he would not even use magic, just words) which would, later on, result in the death of her parents and set her to a completely different path than in Canon. Neville's aversion to Dumbles would start showing after his parents got up... I didn't plan on any smut scenes with the younger girls until 4th year at least where Mc would go to the ball with Daphnee Greengrass, finding out she was spoken for some 70yo wizard from Europe. Pity party on how this was normal... how she doesn't want to lose her virginity to him and they would have ***. Later on, Mc would 'persuade' Lord Greengrass to cancel Daphnee's engagement and give her to him. (Of course, it would not be so straightforward and instead, I planned to cover it in heaps of business deals between Black and Greengrass so the union between Daphnee and Harry would be a reasonable move for Lord Greengrass.) During the fifth year, Harry would try to get rid of Dumbles and bait him into going for the Ring Horcrux... but he would be smart enough to take Snape with him and it would be Snape who would be cursed instead of Dumbles. Susan would be influenced by Cissa and become a kind of 'secretary' for the MC, refusing to part with him which would create friction with her aunt down the line... Dora would become a respectable alchemist, maybe even Alchemy teacher at Hogwarts. (Not really any major plot for her) Final harem was supposed to be MCx Older, Black Women (Cissa, Bella, Dora) and Younger Generation (Susan, Luna, Daphnee) there was supposed to be contrast between the Older Women who had all some kind of regrettable past and Younger Generation who were mostly innocent but as time went on, they would be taught by the Older Generation, Cissa in particular. Dunno, Susan and Luna were supposed to get a lot of guidance from Cissa while Daphnee would idolize the woman due to her political career. Cissa would become a major economic player and a political powerhouse. (Nothing really to say there.) But the most important part was that MC would seem weak and not connected to Blacks in any form. Greengrass would know due to the betrothal but there would have been an ironclad unbreakable vow or something. And later, later on, when Voldemort was dealt with, only then would Dumbledore, and Hermione+Neville start to make waves in the Wizarding world, affecting the mundane one. A war between muggles and wizards, between H+N and Dumbles. all the while Mc would have his own island (country) and somehow try to survive the turbulent times and get into that explosive mix. Well... that was how I wanted it to go :D.
I really enjoyed it regardless of if it was your 'first' or not. I found it fairly clever and very funny. The harem was great and Hadrian having the Lordships, especially Black's, was amazing. It'd be nice to get a continuation someday but it's always best to read what the author has the best motivation to write. I've been reading through all your stories on this site and honestly enjoying all of them. Great work and I look forward to whatever else you produce. Cheers!