I like the mysterious vibe to it. The way Zane doesn't react to much makes him seem a little separated from the other side characters which could be good or bad.
eh not bad it's only just the prologue, it did leave a mysterious type of vibe but again it's just the prologue, also is it just me or did I find a "GOT" reference with the faces.
it was good but you could improve it by proofreading a little and focusing on grammar. I'll add this to library, and hopefully will read through this when I have time.
