Comments of chapter undefined of The Rise of the Ero Masseuse System

And this is dumb... Just sits there thinking to himself about his points, while wasting them...

The elf reveal, I seen it coming, still pleasantly surprised with her comeback.

Author you have fundamental problem with grammer... It doesn't matter whether English is or isn't your native language... Ask yourself whatever native language you speak would you use 1st pov n 3rd pov in a same sentence? like example: I heard scream, his body moved before he know it. it should:- 1st pov: I heard scream, my body moved before I knew it. 3rd piv: He heard scream, his body moved before he knew it. Stories are usually written in 3rd pov n past tense. If you want to include 1st pov then you have to start entire chapter through it or atleast large chunk of chapter in 1st pov. You should never switch between them in matter of 1-2 sentences. This is fundamental of story writing. You should've learn something similar in your native language. Remember all fundamental rules of language are almost same only thing that differs is arrangment of Subject verb and object. for example, English follows: Subject verb Object pattern. while my native lang: Subject Object verb pattern. You just need to compare your native language to English n know the differences. This is how I learnt English.

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Its Bs tbh.

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