MyCatPaws
The plot is good. But!! The writing style is extremely lacking. And there are so many inconsistencies within this chapter. For example, writing at the first person is good in order to explain the character thoughts... But it makes the story completely out of place... Particularly with the stream consciousness style... Jumping from one subject to another, poping out of nowhere and leaving huge plot holes... The chapter gives the reader a lot of information... But should not be written in the First person narrative. It looks like too over the top and yet so lacking in linear logic. But still I got attracted by the novel's resume so the writing should not be so bad
The thing is (like, in every story plot like this) that all they need to do is just not to bully the FM. She knows that that is the reason the "original" was killed and just because she has been reincarnated as her, she doesn't have to bully the FM and be killed... Like, as easy as that. Of course there are usually other factors, like framing and stuff to consider, if the only reason in the book to be killed was because she was a bully, all she would need to do is to not bully anyone and live her respectful life. Otherwise story seems good so far. Thank you very much <3