Loyal_Hunter
ugh, i thought i finally found a good one, with proper grammar, punctuations, capitalization and paragraph breaks but the plot is already familiar and for me, it's overdone. first, I've grown to dislike systems even though yours is more tolerable. next, manipulative dumbledore, it's been done so much, I'm just sick of it. like can't you people write an interesting good dumbledore who just had the misfortune of making so many mistakes who was then made by the ministry as their poster boy. or not even good, just a sad neutral old man that's just tired of seeing dark lords rise coz of his action or inaction and just try to at least do things right even if it's not the best course, coz he's old and set in his ways and disconnected. he is powerful, but not omniscient. also, the incompetent wizarding community, can't they just have been lazy and then let loose. coz to be honest, magic in harry potter is so free you can just get something and not really want something. your writing is great, it's great for people just starting fanfics but not for audiences that have read a lot.