Comments of chapter undefined of Heaven Destroyer
Heaven Destroyer
Eternal_Demon
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Eternal_Demon
This prologue was very disjointed and feels like it is missing some crucial parts that would aid in our understanding, too much telling not enough showing and not enough background for us to understand what the hell is going on. Though it seemed like you somehow expected us to this lack of background made this prologue very inorganic even artificial almost. You gave us no time to form any emotional or otherwise connections and kind of just dumped a bunch of out of synch information at us and expected us to decrypt it and compile it, when you could have built up a background around the character shown and made us invested in him or gave us some understanding of how his situation came to be why did he kill his relatives and how he found the damn banyan tree hole but instead i could care less what happens or has happened to the character because there is no connection formed between the reader and him. I know that this has to built up over time but you didn't really lay any groundwork outside of that sloppy info dump so how am I or anybody else supposed to care to read to that point ? My advice if you really care about your book, try to work in some background to make us empathize with the character maybe not in an extremely meaningful way because that takes time, but to make us feel yeah wow this guy has had a really hard life, and that is enough it doesn't have to be fancy in fact having a overly complicated backstory without a proper framework in place will only makes us feel more emotionally distant, you just need to make us feel something for the character and that is enough to build on. Well I wish you luck regardless of whether you listen to my advice or not or maybe your just satisfied the way it is.
