AUTHOR, you have to edit the parts where they are speaking verbally as that would not be possible for an infant, and they wouldn't do it anyway as mindspeak is faster.
These beginning chapters has the making of a precurser to a pair of ‘Doctor Jeckyll -Mr. hyde’ twins that will take us on One crazy adventure together. Lets see what you got author and translator, I’ll keep my expectations high to your translations of this author’s writing style. Cheers...