Author I like your writing style! It is very present, as the action seems to flow in real time. I feel like I am in man's mind. Excuse while I drink my estrogen pills before I start growing hair! Ahaha! I look forward to reading more.[img=update]
Ok this character is supposedly 1000 years old but inner monologue is like and irreverant ****. I just feel actions,thought process etc should be more mature.
for me at the beginning Alanis seemed rather a "nice" guy - and I'm sure he is - but apparently he is very strong, can defend himself and doesn't mind a fight. i like it :-) and I'm sure I'm going to like Alanis & Beau together