Spirit_of_Impurity
Shizuha1:is this going to continue or has it been dropped?
just finished binge reading this, apart from taking world hopping ideas from others story i feel like this is barely a fan fic and more fiction inspired. so the two things i think stand out that are "bad" about this and i mean bad in a personal taste way as i think it's generally well written with nice twist and turns here and their. 😁 1. The pacing is very fast overall and sorta feels like blitz krieg writing, this makes it harder to grow attached to characters, this is not always the case, but does leave me at least wanting to see many of the characters more fleshed out. 2. the story feels like we are expected to have read if not watched canon stuff of all the worlds that are travelled to in some form or another to understand them better. 😵 it's the reason why once you get to DBZ i'm probably going to be 100% lost since i know next to nothing about it.... this is why i hate fan fictions, but i felt like yours diverged a lot from a typical one to warrant a read. i still think it's a non A typical Fan fic and would really like too see an original story from ya author in the future 😁😋🤗 just... flesh things out some more 😝 thanks for the Read. 🤗