Comments of chapter undefined of My Touch Corpse System
My Touch Corpse System
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Thanks for the chapter^^ Just started it, and it looks quite promising so far^^ (maybe a bit of a generic start, but as the saying goes: never change a running system :D and it works well^^) Just 2 things that stood out to me: 1. Why call the system specifically the "touch corpse system" and not simply the "corpse System"? It seems like a weird specification and thus highlites particularly the "touch" aspect like it's the most important tag, while normally one would think that the focus should be more one the "corpse" aspect. (Also I thinks the shorter name "Corpse System" sounds better :D But that's just a personal preference^^) 2. In the description of the [Touch] ability, the sentence "Inanimate corpses will automatically drop upon death." doesnt really make sense to me o.O Doesnt everything drop an inanimate corpse when it dies? O.o or should it mean that when killing something it stays dead and cant become an undead (Stays an inanimate corpse)? (Site note: i'm not a native english speaker, so maybe take what i said with a grain of salt and i only read the first chapter, so maybe the stuff gets adressed later, in which case just ignore me xD) Nevertheless, its really nice, so please keep up the good work^^
