Comments of chapter undefined of War Online

Grammar wise it was one of the most painful chapters of the book. feels so rushed that it wasnt even read through. I understand that english may not be a first language and I know it is all a learning process. I am not trying to ridicule, just pointing out that you should have a proof reader or something (I get that is what we are, kind of, but our chapter comments will not be enough to correct the whole thing). I still like the story and will see where it goes. keep it up!