Comments of chapter undefined of Gate of Immortality

Overall the plot is a bit rushed in my opinion. I think you should try to add some atmosphere, do some world building, that might help the pacing a bit. Other then that it's just the grammar and writing that needs a whole bunch of work. To improve your own skill level you will have to look up things and practice, but there is another issue too: careless mistakes. So you should definitely review your chapters after writing them, so you can spot the typos and errors like that yourself before posting! Since you said you'll try and edit these chapters, best of luck with that.