Daoist_Xuyi
Critic and sugestion : i myself as reader more liked if the background of the story is hazy and make us guess the back ground our self. This will make us have sense of achivment and make us being tied to the story more. And personaly i dont liked other POV than MC. And dont liked the intrigue/hiden plot being explained (except if it has surfaced and affect the MC directly or MC make realization of the plot himself) Hope my feed back can be some sort of help to you. Creation is hard. Cheers up! And thanks you for your hard work.