I can’t wait for Ellen to realize that Elsie was the one that he was smiling at and that he likes her and not Ellen. I can’t wait to see the look on her Sentias and Monica faces 😈
Don’t worry about it. You are writing a wonderful story and I appreciate that you chose to take the time to make sure it presents exactly the way you thought of it. That’s the sign of an author who cares about what he/she is writing.