Comments of chapter undefined of My Vampire System
My Vampire System
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author please hire an editor. it's a shame because the story is so good yet there have been many grammatical mistakes / errors. the errors aren't detrimental per se, most of them are minors, such as the use of the word 'their vs they're (they are)', etc. and i get it, it sounds the same anyway if you read both words out loud with your mouth but still... i feel like if you keep ignoring this issue, it definitely will impact the enjoyment readers get from reading your story (little by little) đ
I find it kind of stupid that the LEADER of a family can't punish/ harm/execute their members, while it kinda makes sense seeing how everyone is innately loyal to the family so there shouldnt be a need to, but you also have times where they might commit a heinous crime or cases like with a wendigo, wendigo's don't hurt their maker, sure, but apart from that they are uncontrollable beasts that only know to kill and eat, so most would probably need to be put down unless they intend to lock them up and use them as guard dogs or something... also how do the families execute people who break the rules? have them kill themselves? let outsides do it? throw them to beasts??? the logic for it all is just a bit flawed if you ask me
I donât get why the author is over complicating things. Heâs dead. He has no heartbeat. At this point, weâre all assuming Logan messed with the watch to hide this fact, but all they have to do is reveal it. For instance, tell Peter sometime in the middle of the night to suppress his healing factor, disable that function of the watch, and to take no further action until Quinn tells him to. The school will see he mysteriously died thereby evading the Truedream visit. By doing this on Sunday morning it even lessens the chance of him being replaced by someone else. Then they just have to recover the âcorpseâ after burial or before they try to cremate him. This would be a lot easier than trying to fool two very powerful men.
Stop trying to make it seems like the MC cares about humans. Its uncharacteristic of him. You already have shown us he doesnt care about them even when they die so him thinking what would peters parents feel is so out of place. If you feel nothing at a species death then how can you expect to feel empathy for that species. Its like being in the market and looking at chicken wings and wondering how the chicken felt while it was alive. It makes no sense.
