Comments of chapter undefined of My Vampire System
My Vampire System
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Great writing but disappointed by amaking mc stupid to force a plot. Obviously even a stupid person can think when he gets a mission like that, he has to complete it in the night when he is at his strongest and just by simple maths he can count the limited time. He should have known everything, he could have had the basic common sense that he wont have the time to run around during class. Just how stupid can a person get. Aversion to biting?boy ,he had the basic instinct to take a bite and when comparing that to countdown of life to a few hours what do we get?A retarded one that decided to take a nap and take a bite in morning. Your novel was great upto this point. But this feels too forced for me.This is my opinion only, but what can i recommend is taking a few days for writing a longer better chapter rather than rushing it. The starting point is always important for a novel. Later if and only if you plan to continue this novel for a long time and when this novel gets a lot of views you are in for a lot of criticism for this part. I have seen a lot of bad reviews for plot turn worse than this, but boy you are in for a good show!
Story is good but the MC is kinda dumb. MC's low IQ feels forced for story progression. Considering he has already felt the very real impact of the system changes to his body (weakening in sunlight) and has validated the accuracy of the system (health and stats) why is then suddenly dinkering around in a life/death situation? No one but a brick would be like "Hey, the system says I have 15hrs to live if I don't take a sip of this easy (unconscious) meal in front of me so lets ignore it! Lets waste hours going to bed and class while my life quickly depletes!" It would have been better to have him either experiment with blood amounts (couple drops from a cut or full neck gorging) or create a situation where he couldn't drink. Like discovering Lara spying on him and not wanting to risk her finding out. Pretty much anything would have been better than the MC shutting off his brain and going on his merry way like all was well. Story has good premise and decent writing but MC is a bit underwhelming. Just imagine what you yourself would do in the situations the MC is placed in to create a more relatable reaction.
Shit it is. Dropping it immediately.. this is ridiculous.. so much cliche going around. Girl following boy like a stalker for no apparent reason other than hiding his strength, girl gets interested in whatever he does, boy finds the girl when in the most desperate situation and we all know what happens.. and then girl will blush and all the other **** will happen and bam now they are dating..
I can see 2 situations here: 1. The MC is a delusional fool who has no survival instinct. When the system tells you you will loose hp until 0 you make sure you do everything to remedy the terrible situation. 2. The author is a delusional fool who didn't think about a better way to make the MC interact with Layla. What, you thought reader will be OK reading such 2 chapters? MC seems naive but not an idiot. In these 2 previous chapters, you made him act like a 5 years old kid who didn't want to eat his vegetables, even tho it can save his life. A shame. I noticed that the beginnings of this author's novels are pretty bad. This one fellow this rule. Disappointed. The concept is so good, but you decide to take the easy path. I get that it is a web novel, but damn...
Quinn really needs to man up becuase he acts like a mad-man atm. he wont drink the blood of the bull, even in the risk of death, but he attacks some random innocent girl... becuase of his own stupidity. He went after the bully engaging a fight, but acts like a total pushover for the rest of the time. Its hard to see the mc anthing else but as a fool right now. Sure he just discovered that he is a blood-sucking vamp, but his weak-minded mindset makes it hard to sympathize with him. He is a total chicken...
