Comments of chapter undefined of The Magician of Sound

I just realised what this book reminded me of, it’s the irregular at magic high school, over powered bro-con sister recognised by the masses, super powerful brother that’s not recognised by most at the start and is classified as weak. Sister says she owes everything to her brother...

How long is their day on fridays? Previously clad was from 10 till 2 which is 4 hours. How Ho they run for 4 hour, run again for 2 hours and magic for 2 hour plus the push, pull an sit ups?

Wait, that school has a circumference of 5km?! That's pretty huge. Might be better to say school grounds.

A vanguard and scout are basically the same thing. Maybe they mean defense?

Thanks

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a good theme

5k around the school? Big school.

Bloomers??? Is it 1945?

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

well, sorry Kai, but your name is now officially SPEED-O-SOUND SONIC!!!

Kool chap

bob

A 5k run should only take someone jogging around an hour to run not 3 to 4 hours unless the person walked the whole time. Cross country runners will run a 5k anywhere between 15min to 30min. If the use of magic helps then run faster the slowest person casually jogging should still finish in 30min.

I would love to keep reading this story, but I just can't. The story has a lot of potential, but could use a better author. There are just too many grammatical errors, abd the author seems to have this compulsive need to over explain every irrelevant detail while failing to accurately describe important plot scenes. The author also keeps forgetting the difference between past and present tense as well as whether it was a male character he was describing or a female (there were many times the author referred to male characters as her and female characters as he). The author even confused at some point which character was speaking about whom. There were so many times when sentences didn't even make a complete thought or statement. Here is a suggestion for the author. Your story has a lot of potential. Step back, read through your own work, correct all the mistakes which makes this story such a tough read, then release it over again with the revisions. When I am spending so much time on every line trying to figure out what was being said and cirrecting it in my mind just to get to the next line and do the same thing, it becomes pointless to try. As this story is now I cannot even get to the pay chapters before I've given up. I could probably copy this entire story and rewrite it and release it while getting glowing reviews. Author, I would apologize for offending you, but I am equally offended by the complete lack of care you have for your own story to polish it before putting it out there for others to read.