Not_FBI
The concept was good. Naruto with an older sibling is a great idea. But with the inclusion of system and the cheep joke it start to feel generic. Like something a kid would write. Especially with the shop where he could buy sharingan and renegan. Theirs no weight in his character, his interaction with both his parents are abstract and pointless and the only thing on his mind is the most pointless of thing. Why does he need to be like itachi joining war at the age of 5, I mean his not getting training from his parents that's for sure. So why would minato even bring him to the battlefield. Also the time chamber really, way to go and distroying all future hurdles. "oh I'm not strong enough" "oh I'm not smart enough" don't worry we have the time chamber. Wtf the only reason toriyama put in the time chamber to begin with was to show how impossible the ods was at killing cell with normal method of training. Hell even the saiyan couldn't handle the pressure of being inside the time chamber but your character is so powerful his going into it and training everyday. Why don't you just give him saiyan blood and universe level chakra and sharingan, byakugan, tensegan, renegan, sage mode and whatever bs power shove into him from the beginning. Well that's my rant over I'm dropping this good luck on the story...