Comments of chapter undefined of Ascenders Rift

Extremely disappointed in this chapter. Evan, not only stays in school despite his need to grow stronger and save his world as he could easily go and try and find some rifts, and also forgives the people who led to his slow start in the first world to begin with.

What is the point of re-living your life if you are so surprised by every thing.. It really feels like knows nothing., and his personality is way too naive.. Why would he go out of his way to cheer his cousin up?? Give me one solid reason please

Thanks for the chapter Shadowfinger! I wonder if we will get a second one.

Is his name Evan P. White ? Pathetic white knight

Thanks

Thanks

A mc is not an mc if he have party member of the same level as him especially since mc op af classes but apparrrntly that’s not enough so you gonna make him like a heroes party

Yay I am first thnx for the chp arthur

What with all this fillers?

so cliche ......I quit .

Dear author your work is not perfect but it is still good. However, imo you should learn how to express opinions naturally. For example, if main character is saying something wise, the others shouldn't compliment it like 'How wise it is'. This is not natural and annoying. You should blend it with story like 'Although they couldn't understand what does Evan mean by these words they still felt there was more meaning behind it.' Something like that. Although this is also not that good, at least more presentable than simply complimenting your own words. In addition to that, you should practice how a character makes self analysis. Evan is always speaking with himself and this is becoming very annoying. Don't write all this inner dialogues as dialogue. Just explain it. Instead of writing 'I should do this and that' try to write like 'Evan was well aware what should be done and was thinking about doing this and that for a long time' is much readable. I hope u develop urself as time goes. Best regards.

Interesting quote. "A Child sees only the world before him, but an ***** sees the world beyond himself."

😀👍👍Thanks for the Work

Thanks for the chapter.