Comments of chapter undefined of Ascenders Rift
Ascenders Rift
ShadowsFinger
Chapter comments32
Waaaay too much flowery prose. Totally out of place, and incredibly jarring compared to the rest lf the story. It was also about as obvious in purpose as a big flashing neon sign reading "waifu incoming" and blaring some of those air raid sirens. You shouldn't change how you write because of the content of the scenes, if only to be less obvious. Let the content speak for itself.
The romance part was fine since the author has been dropping hints like hotcakes but what really gets me is his lines. Those are actual meckbeard lines hahahahaha, I mean there are more easy to hear and say lines that are not limited to close people but also lines you can say to strangers without making you seem like a creep.
Man, at first I was very confused about the 4th option, but after reading the reviews and seeing that they said the author masked it very well in a certain chapter I went over it, and then I went over the prologue and now with this chapter I am even more sure of it, hopefully I know what the plot twist is now. But ehh I am probably wrong.
