ReincarnatedSaint
It is very interesting. But somehow, it does lack the... how can I say this? It doesn't have any of that detailed sentence stuff. Example- I can't believe that she actually agreed to train me. ME! A worthless nobody, I thought with excitement. She was the highest rank in our class and she choose me to train, wow talk about luck. I could barely contain my happiness as I got up from my chair and started to pick up my textbooks. Example END. Do you understand what I mean now? Everything I've seen so far is very direct. Not very detailed. But direct. The story is really great though. I would prefer that it wasn't told as him telling the story, it makes it harder for the author to put detail into the story or novel. But I still like it so far. Keep it up, good sir!
I never said that he should. I'm just talking about how bland it is. It has no detail to it. Like this, explanation: She smiled and shook her head. Or she smiled graciously and slowly shook her head.... obviously explanation number two was better. It had more depth and detail to it. It had more feeling behind it. I'm talking about details that could be added, not some woman's panties. I could care less about that.
Ashir_Ahmad:I like it the way it is i dont want the author to write a paragraph about a women panty and other paragraohs about her other clothes that would be bs
I can never understand how people justify sealing away your greatest enemy by sacrificing their life... like he's still alive and healing while you who just gave his life to deal him was the only deterrent between him and total annihilation. they always come back and for some reason there are always some "dark disciples" that want nothing more than to see the world burn. so technically that's a fail in my book🤷🏾♂️🤷🏾♂️🤷🏾♂️