Comments of chapter undefined of The Rebirth Of A White Robe Man: I'll Follow You This Time (BL)
ohh little cheng fall asleep... Ren Yuan: -going out whitney's room with disheveled appearance while still in disguise... (blush) -^_^- Shao Family: dumbfounded.. ⊂•⊃_⊂•⊃ then enrages! щ（ﾟДﾟщ） Our little chen innocents!!! Then Ren Yuan removes his disguise.... ۞_۞ ... .... ..... ....... Shao family: Ren Yuan you should call ur father let talk things properly then maybe you too needed to live together after this. (the brothers wails ゜・．（ｉvｉ）｡：ﾟ brother) (the sisters and the twin mothers ゜・．（ｉvｉ）｡：ﾟ the baby bugs (*・∀・*)人(*・∀・*) Purple Bug : (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ going crazy here..... ☆*: .｡. o(≧▽≦)o .｡.:*☆ i think my comment is nonsense...haha
I left a paragraph comment on page one of this chapter about how I would edit the chapter for style and clarity. It's a feature of the author's style that they like to write sentences with a lot of details and additional information. Sometimes this can be confusing to read, so I would recommend trying to break these long sentences into multiple sentences, or eliminating some of the adjectives. It's hard to know how much to edit someone else's writing: if you edit it too much, you might make it sound like it's written by a different person. 🤔
