Comments of chapter undefined of If I'm Male, I Can Avoid a Yandere, Right?
If I'm Male, I Can Avoid a Yandere, Right?
SkyHighLimits
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I liked reading this, it also made me feel bad for Haru, and Ryu too Oof Akira really do be acting suspicious though đ¤
Rezkin_kdt:Who is Monika, I feel like I know it, but it's not ring any bells right now.
Hahaha. That ending reaction was hilarious to me. I burst out laughing in the middle of my kitchen. I want to put a bit of criticism on the side here. As much as I liked that reaction at the end. There is something that bothers me about it. So far, the POV of the reader, is amazing and relatable. But I am a tad bit worried about if that type of reaction gets repeated. I can pull it off as flustered, cause yâknow, ice king. But should the person/reader be more cautious? (And maybe even expect that type of stuff. Since they have well thought out knowledge of yandereâs.) Which, in itself is amazing. Thatâs a big part of how to be relatable. Because the same type of people who come to read this ALSO know a lot about yandereâs. Including myself. But that surprised reaction just seems out of character to me. Sure, you could put that as a character fault. âTrusting others to easily.â But it makes no sense here, since she knows who to watch out for, (mostly) She even knows who they are, easily sees social clues of danger, (+1 for that. Relatable once again. Thank you author)- and how sick/twisted they can be. Not trying to de-motivate you or to change how things are going. But explaining a bit more of her plan in a chapter would be nice. Iâm not even sure what her exactly plan is besides making the yandereâs go against each other. And even then... There would probably still be one left. So Iâm not sure how much she thought this through. It seems like a half-planned thing thatâs going in the back-burner as the chapters go on. Showing her planning/scheming, would give her time to shine, specially giving the readers a view that she actually going through the steps of a plan. And wouldnât fall into the naive trope that Iâm sure we all dislike. Sorry for the long rant. Once again, your story, you can take this for grain of salt. Or this could give you an idea to improve your story for the readers. Either way. This story has made my year in this tough time in quarantine. So donât be afraid to be proud of yourself.
