Comments of chapter undefined of Mob devil's guide to surviving DxD
Mob devil's guide to surviving DxD
Arnold_11
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... a bold face lie that won’t hurt anyone yeah so let’s just remove all your memory of all your happiness in life and lie about your parents so we can control you instead of just bringing you on our side like normal people by dating and winning affection it’s much easier and faster to just destroy your life and give you a new one that’s not evil in the slightest and that’s just as bad as grooming a child pedophilia kidnapping and basically mind control and basically slavery because he is not giving her a chance and for what she is too valuable that’s his excuse for removing anything about her self from existence kmt
of course, memories can be restored. who's to say he didn't restore them in the intermission, but the important part is anyone that knew of her existence prior now the longer exist. So it doesn't matter if her own personal memories restored. Not a big deal. especially if it happens before she wakes up
All right, story time. So due to some Series of Unfortunate Events. I had my laptop stolen. I bought a new one from Amazon, but here's was the problem. Something or another happened and I lost access to my Amazon account. And this being after I had already placed an order for a new laptop. Some nonsense after other nonsense, my account got locked, and then after several days of problems had lots of arguing with customer service, got reinstated. But the thing is, my order for the laptop did not show up on my account anymore. As if it never existed, and I even got my $800 back. But the kicker is that my laptop did come in the mail the next day. So not only do I have the laptop, but I also have my $800 I have no idea what I should do. Return it? Keep it?
This chapter doesn't work with your current story. First of all this is the last or one of the last chapters you posted before you decided to completely rewrite your story. It work in pre-write because it had a much darker undertone then you have in your current story. Then there is a complete change in your mc from a hard-working, upbeat, perverted, extreme researcher, slit manipulator with rias to a complete manipulator, controlling, kidnapper, sadist, taking what he wants. So how does he go from one to the other. Then there is authority of gluttony. First how in the hell does he all of a sudden have this extremely dominatimg power. Also there is no way in the dxd universe that he could make a magic spell that can erase the memory of someone from all the existence of the world. You are pretty much saying Lin can erase the memory of a god then erase the memory of every person the knows them to pretty much make them not have existed. But he cant even defeat tiamet. Who is at best in the top 30 strongest beings in that universe. Sorry but there is now way in hell he could make a spell that could do that in the dxd universe especially when he is high class at best, even with his self made system. But this is just my opinion you are free to ignore it or not. I will say I like your rewrite better then your pre-rewrite.
