Comments of chapter undefined of The Oracle Paths
The Oracle Paths
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Author, honest critique here. this chapter felt contrived, it was a series of "I've got you now" followed by "but then suddenly" moments only to end in an "intervention by god". it feels like you needed to bring something about or have something happen but you did it in a very hamfisted way. consider taking the time to rethink your approach, and spread this across more chapters perhaps, as well as rethink The Nullifiyer, he just seems to be invented just to throw away all of what Jake did to get better. It's fine that Jake has a power level reset between ordeals as it makes sense to calibrate his ordeal for his ability, but if you do it in the ordeal by inventing a character to defeat him it *feels* cheap. I've been really enjoying your novel up until now, and it feels like you're.. maybe not sure how to get to where you need the novel to be? just, take this as non-malicious critique.
How the F does this Nullfyer know this stuff????? He is suppose to only be on his 4th ordeal just like Jake. HOW the Heck does he have this knowledge? No one from the 4th ordeal level should even come close to knowing what this Nullfyer knows. The oracle device stops people from telling them this kind of information. So, once again how the Heck does Nullfyer have knowledge way beyond his Ordeal level? The author better pull some information out of his butt to explain all of this!!!!
hello ark, I must ask a question how can you nullify a bloodline, I mean it does not make any sense to nullify something like your species. it's like you say to monkey to stop being a monkey. the result is nothing you are basically saying that I nullify your existence. that's it for my question hope you can answer that man. ps: entre fr on se sert les coudes nan đȘđ