Comments of chapter undefined of Mark Him Not
Mark Him Not
DriewNrocinu
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Ok first this chapter again is very confusing. First he's in a room then Chris is driving saying the'll get somewhere soon. You say he's naked, does she see him like that? Ok I have two guesses as to who his alpha is. One is Felix and the other is John but neither option seems right. He has seen both recently. John was smaller and he would know his voice so it shouldn't be him. He just visited Felix and Calix so if it was either of them he should recognize their voice again. It just isn't realistic that he wouldn't be able to know someone's voice after so long. I also can't think of any good reason that he would need to hide who he is. I can understand if he had to hide their relationship from others buy why from his partner? No possible explanation for that makes sense.
Im so at a loss! This is going to hurt Kyle so much, his alpha is really starting to piss me off! I think he's going to starting to regret having an alpha and looking at this mate/fate as a curse. Since he found or I should say his alpha found him, his life went from calm to flipped the hell upside down. Is he happy anymore?
Ugh I am so technically deficiant. I wanted to reply to your reply but couldn't see any reply on any of the comments so I could reply. Anyway I'm glad you weren't offended. Some people can get really angry when others offer crit on their work. I actually want to work as a beta reader on fiver( https://***.fiverr.com/share/VDyZwl ). a beta reader looks over someones writing and gives detailed advice on characters, plot, flow, and inconsistencies. They do not cover grammar or spelling, that is an editor. Your story is very interesting so I wanted to mention it in case you wanted more in depth help.
