Comments of chapter undefined of My Hero Academia: Killer Quirk!!
My Hero Academia: Killer Quirk!!
Arada
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Cough, Post rumi aiden seems worse than dark star aiden. warp of originali ntentions and morals. becoming a prideful idiot. Losing all brain cells.
Basically the motiVe of ‘true hero’ just disAPpears. THat Would honestly be really cool if yOu intRoduced sevelopemt to show him slowly frogetting things and getting caught up in areogance and prid and al thAt shit. (Omg i hate my Keyboard) but it doesnt. the plot feels overly rushed And a lot of Potential seems to be wasted. My roblem is tat if you were goingto contort the personality, Not onlydid tou not do it precsiey govonh an unclear image, his actions dont fit with the image. you made him a conceited prICk. and while o could inderstamd why hed be noce to mina. Hsi Behaviour is really inconsisent. 1.friend with mina friend with kendo friend with momo, But looks down on eveyone wlse making horrid and condescending comments? Wouldnt this soari some tension in his alreAdy esTablished friendships? I dont see why he wouldnt like pssiohate charcters like lida and midoriyA when mina is iterakly a ballof energy. He forms prejuDice Super Easily and hes a little prIck whos disrespectful to A bunch of peOle for no reason. this makes me Wonder Why he accomdatws Them. i onow tis happend to bakugi and all but kiroshima had to repeatedly break his defenses down before friendships could happen. there was literally no development with aiden. Like yes, be soft but wheres the development?? Without the progrEssion writen doWn id doubt someone like aiden would even deal or talk to them. id think he would Be more like todoroki, eg arogant aT the start. The plot just sees very controved and Unrealistic and i think itd be better if you slowed it down And took time to focus on the cahracter rather than the events. yes, just some Feedback and advice.
Im not saying anything about anyone here, but i really hate it when a mc does like one thing even close to a beta male and everyone just explodes "he's a beta male now?!? Then this whole story is ruined! I can't believe that i was reading about a BETA MALE!!!!" At least wait a couple chapters to see if that's the "direction" the author is going.
Sorry, I get that you want to introduce a specific direction the MC is going towards, but that is just wrong. His whole past makes it practically impossible to live normally and be ‘softer’, his stay with Rumi woudn’t change anything about that, if you think differently than you obviously have no idea about the human psyche. And him ‘chilling’ is kinda wrong personality-wise as he grew up learning to crave strength and going about hunting people for a decade, something like that doesn’t change in some month. So if you just argue like his former lifestyle is changed because Dark Star was wiped out and the Old Man made him promise some bull*rap, which miraculously changes his whole personality and habits than that’s not character or plot development, but just bad/cliche writing. I thought he would stay like he was, as that would have been a character I would love to read more about in the MHA-world, but you making him into some lazy and nerfed dude. Also if he spent more than a decade fighting/assassinating heroes and villains, I just don’t get why he didn’t develop his quirk more, you just blew us of by saying he had a trauma, but that’s a really big stretch. Not experimenting and training his quirk in different directions for ten years is not really believable... I also want to say, that your story has some really good points and I enjoyed a big of it, but as described above there are some massive plot holes in the story from my point of view, nonetheless I will keep a lookout for other stories you may write in the future and you will hopefully avoid same mistakes, as you have a really creative mind, just don’t follow other cliche developments and go crazy and stay true to your characters. Personally I really don’t get others saying that the MC has to be careful to not stand against the whole world, but in a world with superpowers isn’t that kind of stupid as you were practically given a tool that enables you doing just that? Anyway, you are free to do what you like, this was just me trying to give you a little comment/review...
I mean he treated those people who basically tortured him for the sake of training as his family. He may be cold-blooded but that doesn't mean he has feelings. He himself is trying to be normal and live happily as sorta-promised to the old man. He's been able to broaden his view so he knows that good people (true heros no matter how stupid) actually exist so why can't he learn to show empathy to his classmates. He may hate them (but again like his "second family") but he still has sime semblance of feelings for them.
I have nothing against character development, but it feels like all that development happend "off-screen" in a time skip. We went from seeing Assassin Aiden killing and maiming an entire mercenary group, to seeing him monologuing through an entire fight like some 2bit villain explaining his masterplan.
Screw the naysayers Arada. Nothing wrong with giving Aiden a softer attitude. 1 the old man who taught him told him to be happy. 2. He’s not part of a secret assassin organization anymore. 3. He didn’t freeze, he kept his desire to slaughter all those villains in check until he had a reasonable excuse. 4. Even psychopaths need somebody to lean on if only for a moment and Aiden certainly isn’t a psycho
