the first chapter narration was mid or you could say average so I went with the flow but after that cringey opening speech of 'I have awoken' was deadass cringe I really wanted to drop it after I read the last line. I hope this novel's doesn't disappoint me further
Enjoyed this chapter as well. I pointed out a few errors for you in the chapter comments you can just delete them when you get around to editing but overall it was still a good read keep up the hard workđđż
Hey its, with not wiht.
Your story has a lot of grammatical problems, download "Grammarly" App from play store as it auto corrects lots of mistakes.
Anyway, nice work.