CCmei
The story writing has become more and more incoherent...like I get the concept of creative writing. Expressions through showing rather then telling. However, this chapter was becoming increasingly difficult to read as it progressed. What even happened at the end? I don’t know and at this point I’m not sure I really care. The actual plot has barely progressed. What is evening happening? Where is this story going? Instead of being all artsy with the writing (and the grammer mistakes makes it harder to understand) can we have some coherent plot and dialogue...I really do love this story, in fact its the only story thats keeping me from deleting webnovel altogether. Therefore, don’t give up on this story as it really has so much potential. I am still looking forward to what happens in future.
This story. Sophie's story. The siblings. Leon. Anyone in the island. All of 'em makes one realize the deepest, darkest and fears of a person. Every wish, regrets and hopes, even coping mechanism of a human being makes you realize what you truly desire. To live, fight or give up. Author, I dont know if your studying psych or anything related but this story is really an addictive one.
Please tell me Leon didn't disappear. I kind of understand where he is coming from, the future (Sophie experienced) Leon. I really wish for that kid to not disappear but I also don't want him to be subjected to whatever is going to happen or currently happening on the island. Maybe he gained the power of invisibility. When June was cooking up ideas to "clean" Leon, for a moment I wondered how is it that June is worried about cleanliness and not Mattie. I really love how you described Sophie's cold as wanting to deep throat a cactus. That might have been the closest one could go to describe the feeling. Also, I've never heard or read it being described that way. Sandeep might be one of the only people who didn't sexually approach Sophie, isn't he? Her voice of reason sounds a lot like him means she really considered him as one of her aides, if he can be described as one. Or we could call him an advisor. The beginning of the chapter about hunting and pigs could have turned me vegetarian or even vegan of I hadn't visited a slaughterhouse or butcher's shop. That didn't turn me off. Does that mean my internal Sophie is not deep inside? Maybe she's lurking under the surface of my skin or a few layers deeper. Something flashed in my mind during the vending machine chapter but it was a fleeting thought. It now hits with full force.Thinking about this. She brought back meds from her dream, in which she goes to the future. I hope we're on the same wavelength right now. So, what are the expiry dates of the meds? Or the manufacturing dates for that matter. Curiouser and Curiouser.