Comments of chapter undefined of I Deserve a Second Chance
I Deserve a Second Chance
Gold_Paper_Crane
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Amanda_BaerwaldLv14Amanda_Baerwald
LaurasiscoyoteLv4Laurasiscoyote
ScarlettbunnyLv11Scarlettbunny
Alright. Honestly it's a shaky first chapter but that's okay. You will never get a handle on writing until 10,000 words in. It's hard to get emotions down, right descriptions and writing style down. It's not bad, rather average as far as things go. I suggest you come back to this chapter and edit it when you have your writing style down. On another note... Damn that friend's weight needs to go up! Feed the child some fried chicken or something 110 pounds when you're 5'8. đ°đ°đ° You are horribly under weight... My heart feels for you so much.đđđ
