Comments of chapter undefined of Prime Originator

Your chapter was awesome with good description Don't start skipping such scenes later as scenes like these are also important 😋😋

The 'action' in this chapter felt a bit awkward. I think, that, in this type of novel, you don't have the describe so much(even if it was still quite tame). The best would have brobably been describing the kiss, the one or two words to explain that they did the deed, and skip to the conversation and taughs of after the action. anyway, that's just my opinion, it was still a good chapter, good job

A bit forced? Hell if he was being held at gun point it wouldn't be nearly as forced.

I quite liked this novel. but this leon guy is such a manwhore.. I dont understand why girls would abandon their self respect and throw themselves at him. I don't know if I can stomach reading this type of unfaithful mc who just has no sense of loyalty and would do the deed with every chick that shows interest on him. pity because its a good novel. at least with coiling dragon and I shall seal the heavens, the mc's were all faithful to person who is their love interest. the mc in this novel is such a trashy person who would fu##k every girl he deems attractive.. ughh😑😒😤

Long bulging dragon....

hmmm...with the beastmen being a thing, it wouldn't be too far-fetched if there are ice phoenix bloodlines out there, or something similar that could evolve into one. I really like the setting, author.

What have you done to my little brother, Author-san! 🤥

Thanks for the chapter :)

AYO WHY WHY HER OF ALL THE GIRLS WHY HER

Tks Chapt

good

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I want the girls in this novel to have a bit more self respect and be independent women, grow strong and the mc and his wives sharing their pains and joy together

the first scene was decent for your first attempt for sure. but i believe it would be 100x better if you went into more detail and described the events more than just two paragraphs, it’s way more immersive with a chapter and allows us to feel the emotion. please take this into consideration

the action sucks. only few sentences. we need to see a whole chapter with lemon scene. I do hope in the future I see some Action. don't let my expectations falls okay.

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JAJAJAJJAAJ soy nuevo leyendo novelad y al leer este capitulo me moria de risa 😂 Gracias por el capítulo JAJAJAJA

oh yeah

The biggest suprise is they were not seen... or were they?