Comments of chapter undefined of The Ultimate Host

Errr.... How should I put it... 🤔 To author, sorry but can u plz separate the paragraf n make it Clear whether it's a dialogs or just some explanation (for example using "" for when the characters talk)?

Good stuff man You should delete the old reviews that says the novel has bad grammar cuz you clearly have improved and those review would turn away potential readers

I see that this book has a very intriguing storyline and lots of potential. The main problem is that the grammar is not up to my standard. I hope you take my advice and become a better author! Having multiple smaller paragraphs is much better than one gigantic blob of words. This makes it easier for everyone to read. Create a new paragraph whenever a new topic is introduced, as well as when a new character speaks. Another thing is to use quotations when someone is speaking. There are many different ways to do this. EG: "I love reading," Martha said, "It's my hobby!" EG: "Stop!" he screeched. Lastly, use proper punctuations -especially the dashes! I find that there are many misplaced punctuations everywhere. Perhaps you should get an editor to help enhance your story.

OMG that was so badly written it was ridiculous. I really hope English isn’t your first language. Please, show, don’t tell. Add some actual details as well.

is this story harem. can any1 comment?

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You have all this chapters. Try to separate the paragraph and edit a little bit and you'll be good.

Thanks for the chapter on a good story

Congratulations brother can't wait to read more